Persuasive witting why Home work shouldn't be banned

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		I believe all homework  shouldn’t be banned  Because when you need to get work up to date after school you can’t because you do not have your netbook with you to keep up to date. Homework helps you learn faster with other people at your house to help you with what to do and you might learn it before the whole class does. You couldn’t take your netbook home if you didn't have homework.
		Homework shouldn’t be banned because it helps understanding complex work, you get support at home to help with what you don’t understand and what you do not know what to do, it is proven sometimes kids would ask their parents what this means because parents have done this they would put it in a way that kids would understand.
		Homework helps keep your work up to date if you were slacking at school and playing at school and not  doing what you need to do. It would keep you from getting a hiding  from your parents when you get home from school. Because helps you understand work and helps you move up from a level at reading writing maths. Plus you get some time to get updated with work and you get to improve without staying in lunch morning tea and after school.  Try to not just make up an excuse. when you have homework  you get a second chance of finishing that work without getting a red dot on your head.
	.	You won’t be able to bring your netbook home if don’t have homework your parents ,could lose their job just because you don’t have a netbook  your parents would get stressed out there are for your parents would be in a bad mood and your going to get told off more than usual. You won’t Get time to spend with them . so your parents who need to use  your netbook for work. Because you didn’t bring your netbook.It’s common in a family that parents use their children devices for work and to keep electricity bills low. So your parents can do their work and you can watch tv
		Homework is important because without home work we couldn’t improve we couldn’t do a lot of things like spending time with our parents watch tv, your parents could be  in a good mood, you not getting a hiding, you couldn't get free time, your parents not being proud of you just because you didn’t do your work.

Persuasive writing why homework shouldn't be banned

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Topic: Homework shouldn’t  be banned
Reason 1	Because it helps you do some work to memories what to do at school.
Reason 2	Helps keep you up to  date with your work.
Reason 3	You wouldn’t take your netbook home.
Reason 4 Reason 5	Helps with your learning  Why homework is important

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There is a myth about a man with no face ,a man who can live forever and  can use magic. Some people say he is evil, some say behind the cloak is just darkness but some say behind the cloak is a man who fights evil and slays the evil. Some say he  is a mythical hunter of evil or he is the evil. Only few have seen him alive but no one has seen what's in the cloak. If you have a question about him just ask me. But don’t mock him or he will find you and end you, I know I’ve seen it.  

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